The Expanse
By Zarah Parker
What is a universe
which sits above
the glimmer of my eyes,
resting without peace.
What is a galaxy
in which we can see
beyond our years,
but is only worth
the seconds it takes to breathe.
What is a great light
which nourishes the expanse
and balances the
very life that is
resting.
A current work in progress.
Constructive criticism?
Memoir of a Writer 
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A novel’s title rarely tells us much. But a poem’s title, it would seem, becomes part of the poem itself. Without your title, this poem would be well written, but without foundation. The title gives it that.
Is this true of other poems? Of poetry in general? To what degree, if any?
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The title of anything is a form of foundation. Jane Austen’s Pride and Prejudice is about a lot of things…two of them being pride and prejudice. Charles Dicken’s Bleak House is (roughly) a story revolving around people living in Bleak House. I think the more modern you the more people try to be clever with their titles. Even then, it’s a foundation. But with poetry, it seems it can go either way. I’ve read poems where the title didn’t make sense until I took the time to really examine the poem. Or they’ve been obvious, the title is the first sentence of the poem, etc.
So any title is a form of foundation regardless of novel or poetry because either one can be vague or obvious… but to be to vague is to confuse the reader, almost, subconsciously.
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